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Post by Fredrex00 on Sept 3, 2008 20:09:23 GMT -5
Please talk about the new Gundam fan fiction here! Post your comments, ideas, and gripes with it here.
My Comments on Ch 0.1:
Honestly, it took me forever to come up with something like that. It all came to me when I began to question things that I normally don't question. Boredom snowballed into this very fan fiction. I know it was short, but I wanted to simulate that the Doctor was going to write something really long, but gets killed. Also, I wanted to draw you in further into the story :3.
Hope everyone enjoys!
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Post by Talon on Sept 3, 2008 20:11:11 GMT -5
Good god man! That monologue was F*CKING EPIC! Need MOAR!
*cough* Good story so far, I friggin love it!
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Post by Azure_Ghidorah on Sept 3, 2008 20:19:57 GMT -5
Ah... Monolouges... I've tried to create stories centered around a Kaiju-sized Solranous by starting with something like this. Lets see if yours will thrive where mine has died off.
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Post by Fredrex00 on Sept 3, 2008 20:24:37 GMT -5
Thanks guys. Hopefully Chapter 1 will be up soon. That is...if school doesn't kill me first...
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Post by Fredrex00 on Sept 6, 2008 21:07:55 GMT -5
Mission 1.0 is up now! Please tell me your thoughts. Also wanna point out that if your a very religious person, somethings may offend. Just wanted to be safe. But please enjoy the read!
Mission 1.0 Comments:
Honestly, I LOVED writing this chapter. I wanted to put in a bit of mystery, but I wanted to show a new kind of hero. You know how much I love the Super Robot, Hot-blooded heroes, but I wanted something like that and more. I wanted a tough badass that would kick anyone's ass, yet be silent and almost dead on the inside from a traumatic event in his life. I will soon start to have the story switch to the 3rd person perspective in Mission 1.1. Hope you enjoy!!
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Post by Azure_Ghidorah on Sept 6, 2008 21:25:19 GMT -5
Aw, I like the first person perspective... Oh well, you are the writer...
Honestly not a major fan of Gundam... and I scared myself when I didn't bat an eye at the crimes you described for that one crook the main character killed in prison.
Sorry, off track, any ways, I never watch much Gundam, but you've definetely got me caught hook, line, and sinker.
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Post by Talon on Sept 6, 2008 21:32:15 GMT -5
Freaking awesome, man! You had the dialogue, the atmosphere, all of it! I look forward to the next chapter like I look forward to Christmas Break! >.<
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Post by Fredrex00 on Nov 8, 2008 23:15:51 GMT -5
Gasp! A new chapter!? Even thought school is still kicking my Arse!? Yes, indeed folks, a new chapter has arrived! Kind of lengthy, but it gets the ball rolling. And a cliffhanger just for you all!
Author's Thoughts:
Phew, finally got that one out of the way. I switched now to a third person perspective now. Don't worry, I'll be switching into First Person here and there. But hell that was a lot to write. Hope it isn't too boring >.>. Please direct your comments and questions please!
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Post by Talon on Nov 8, 2008 23:34:19 GMT -5
Woot! New chapter! *falls to knees and cries tears of burning joy* Thank you!!! *cough* Anyway, yeah, was a bit slow, but now that I have a developing plot to look at, I like it! The switch between perspectives sounds intruiging too... all in all is good! Coulda been a bit more descriptive, but eh, still good.  ....and that voice on the broadcast.... I couldn't help but think of the Xillian Commander from Final Wars... lol |
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